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where did the knowledge come from? it comes from discoveries and inventions. so[1] it’s not difficult to deduce that the original source of knowledge is fantasy or imagination that can accelerate the progress in both scientific and article fields. there’s no doubt that is there’s no imagination or fantasy at all, knowledge will never exists. so[2] it’s not difficult to get the answer that talent of creativity is more critical for us than the ability to absorb certain knowledge.

where does knowledge come from? it comes from discoveries and inventions. so it’s not difficult to deduce that the original source of knowledge is fantasy or imagination that can accelerate the progress in both scientific and artistic fields. there is no doubt that without imagination or fantasy knowledge would never exist.[3] therefore, it’s not difficult to conclude that talent and creativity are more critical than the ability to absorb knowledge.

学生习作（第二段）

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invention is the result of a creative process, and those inventions or discoveries are often examples taught in today’s class. take electronic light as an example, the inventor of it[4] is edison who had created many things we are using today. he had done more than 3000 experiments before he finally found the correct material that can light enough and not easy to melt at a really high temperature. during his 3000 experiments, he imagines everything in his daily life, including iron, bamboo and even the red beard of his colleagues. his patience and curiosity together with his imagination and fantasy helped him successfully invented[5] the light bulb that we are still using nowadays.

invention is the result of a creative process, and those inventions or discoveries are often examples taught in today’s class.  take electric bulb as an example, the inventor, edison, created many things we are using today. he conducted over 3,000 experiments[6] before he found the correct material to create light and did not melt at high temperatures. during those 3,000 experiments he imagined using many things including iron, bamboo, and even his colleague’s red beard. his patience and curiosity together with imagination and fantasy helped him to successfully invent the light bulb that we still use to this day.

学生习作（第三段）

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not only scientists need creativity but also artists need it. the well known artist von gothe used to say that: “there’s nothing more dreadful than imagination without taste.” by that he emphasized the significance of taste. however, as matter of fact[7], in his renowned painting about stars at night, he portrayed a world full of imagination, for instance the star under his pen[8] is just like a whirlpool that gives us infinite fantasy about space and universe.

not only scientists but also artists need creativity.[9] the well known artist von gothe used to say that: “there’s nothing more dreadful than imagination without taste.” by that he emphasized the significance of taste. however, in his renowned painting of stars at night, he presented a world full of imagination such as the stars under his brush are like a whirlpool that allows us infinite fantasies about space and the universe.

学生习作（第四段）

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between knowledge and creativity, which one is more important? as far as i considered, knowledge is just[10] based on imagination and fantasy of the people in the past. so[11] we apparently draw the conclusion that ability of creativity is more critical for us than the capability of absorb certain positive knowledge.

between knowledge and creativity, which one is more important? as far as i am concerned, knowledge is based on the imagination and fantasy of people in the past. therefore, we can draw the conclusion that creativity is more critical than the absorption of certain knowledge.