一、避免使用语意弱的“be”动词。

　　1、把句中的表语转换为不同的修饰语。例如： &3I'/-le`3k} [ 本 资 料 来 源 于 贵 州 学 习 网 外语园地雅思 http://Www.gzU521.com ] &3I'/-le`3k}

　　weak: the trees are bare. the grass is brown. the landscape seems drab. revision:the brown grass and bare trees form a drab landscape. (转换为前置定语)

　　or: the landscape, bare and brown, begged for spring GREen. (转换为并列结构作后置定语)

　　2、将作表语用的形容词或名词变为行为动词。例如：

　　1) weak: the team members are good players.

　　revision: the team members play well.

　　2) weak: one worker’s plan is the elimination of tardiness.

　　revision: one worker’s plan eliminates tardiness.

　　3、在以“here”或“there”开头的句子中，把“be”动词后的名词代词变成改写句的主语。例如：

　　1) weak: there is no opportunity for promotion.

　　revision: no opportunity for promotion exists.

　　2) weak: here are the books you ordered.

　　revision: the books you ordered have arrived.

　　二、多用语意具体的动词，保持句意简洁明了。例如：

　　1、poor: my supervisor went past my desk.

　　better: my supervisor sauntered (=walked slowly) past my desk.

　　2、poor: she is a careful shopper.

　　better: she compares prices and quality.

　　三、尽量运用主动语态。例如：

　　1、weak: the organization has been supported by charity. t uyfmBoi$!;'J,[ 此文转贴于我的学习网外语园地雅思 http://www.Gzu521.com]t uyfmBoi$!;'J,

　　better: charity has supported the organization.

　　2、weak: the biscuits were stacked on a plate.

　　better: mother stacked the biscuits on a plate.

　　四、防止使用语意冗长累赘的词语。例如：

　　1、wordy: my little sister has a preference for chocolate milk.

　　improved: my little sister prefers chocolate milk.

　　2、wordy: we are in receipt of your letter and intend to follow your recommendations.

　　improved: we have received your letter and intended to follow your recommendation.

　　3、redundant: we had a serious crisis at school yesterday when our chemistry laboratory caught fire.

　　improved: we had a crisis at school yesterday when our chemistry laboratory caught fire.

　　4、redundant: my sister and i bought the same, identical dress in different stores.

　　improved: my sister and i bought the same dress in different stores.

　　五、杜绝滥用陈旧词语或难懂的专业术语。例如：

　　1、weak: they will not agree to his proposals in any shape or form.

　　improved: they will not agree to any of his proposals.

　　2、weak: i need her financial input before i can guesstimate our expenditures next fall.

　　improved: i need her financial figures before i can estimate our expenditures next fall.